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They have an impulsion disorder
grabbing the gun in the worst of quandary's
They think it's their only option
Grimaces and frowns have made them weary

A metallic black gun, they hold in shaking hands
and gaze at it with an overwhelming confusion
what are they doing with such a deadly weapon
It all seemed like a lethal illusion

The sky is a thick twilight
filled with ultraviolet rays and mystique
for a moment they feel euphoria
the feeling is strong but their heart is just too weak

The gun is pressed against a head
delicate fingers rest on the precarious trigger
BANG, sudden vibrations shake an entire being
cascading towards the ground releasing all the last vigor

Their face has changed from a powder pink to a crimson shade
with frowning faces they cover them with a sheet
They embraced death like everyone told them to
their life of misery has ended with defeat
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After a lot of thinking and help from my buddies, I've finished my poem for the contest! \owo/

I used word back #1 for this... (Contest word bank xD)
I took all 8 words from this wordbank and showed them to my friend, Panda-Sama, to see what she thought I should write about. When I first looked at the words I thought "reuniting with a loved one." but she said it could be about death....and I actually ended up completely turning around my entire idea. XD

So yeah....I hope you like it :iconme2smart4u: :iconpresentsplz:
I'm happy with the way it turned out. ^^

~Tsuki-Chan~
The origanial picture: [link]
The preview pic for this is edited by me.
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*Me2Smart4U Dec 10, 2012  Student Digital Artist
WOW...The emotions within this poem is strong and very powerful. The contrast of this piece sets the mood for the whole poem for it engages me as the reader to deeply feel the true emotions expressed...I really enjoyed your creative flow of words:clap:

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Below is the Check List...
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:bulletred: Word Bank in comment box---(checked)

:star::bulletred: Word Count 8---(your total=8 )

in this line Their face has changed from a power pink to a crimson shade
---you used (power) instead of (powder)

:bulletred: 20 lines---(you total=20 )(checked)

:bulletred: Sent link---(checked)

I hope I wasn't too picky...
I really enjoyed your wonderful piece
please edit whats missing
and you are good to go...
Thank you very much for entering...
:heart:Good Luck:heart:
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~WafflesxSyrup Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, thank you, I tried my best. :)
Sorry bout that, it was meant to be Powder and has been changed! :D
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*Me2Smart4U Dec 10, 2012  Student Digital Artist
it's no problem... I thought it was a tyop...
it was truly well written :nod:
you are good to go my friend..
I wish you luck :boogie:
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~WafflesxSyrup Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :tighthug:
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*Me2Smart4U Dec 10, 2012  Student Digital Artist
:hug::hug:
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~sleepy-kisses Dec 8, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Powerful poem
:iconclapplz:
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~WafflesxSyrup Dec 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much:heart: c:
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